My Wednesday’s Writing Tip…

How many “things'” are in your sentences? Not things, but the actual word “things.” Probably more than you think.

To be more succinct in your writing, how about just naming what those things are?

Example #1:
Old sentence:
There were various things about the business relationship that bothered Jim.
Corrected sentence:
There were various principles and standards regarding the business relationship that bothered Jim.

And then to make the sentence “active” and not “passive,” you can correct it even further:
Various principles and standards regarding the business relationship bothered Jim.

Example #2:
Old sentence:
There were so many things she had to do before the wedding day.
Corrected sentence:
There were so many tasks she had to complete, such as phone calls made and caterers interviewed, before the wedding day.

And then, to make the sentence more exciting, you can correct it even further:
The many tasks to be completed before the wedding day, such as phone calls made and caterers interviewed, overwhelmed her.

Hope these things helped. What things? Oh yeah, these suggestions. Hope these suggestions helped!

Writefully yours,

Terri

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